I can’t feel my fingers
All I see is white
It’s been a year since the sky exploded with ice
They warned
We didn’t listen
Then everything went downhill
I can’t feel my fingers
All I see is white
The world was gripped with terror
Chaos
Nobody knew what to do
Then everything went downhill
I can’t feel my fingers
All I see is white
People died
Animals died
Plants died
The earth died
Then everything went downhill
I can’t feel my fingers
All I see is white
I’m alone
I don’t know if others survived
God, I’m hungry!
Everything’s going downhill
I can’t feel my fingers
All I see is white
Excruciatingly starving
Looking at my hands
Drooling
Everything’s gone downhill
*Inspired by the movie, Snowpiercer and Stephen King’s short story, Survivor Type.
Too good!! The concrete part excellently done! And the anaphora too.
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Thanks! I almost gave up… Glad I didn’t. 🙂
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I see a nice, long, short story here. I’ll be more than happy to read it if you write one. 🙂
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Why thank you! 🙂
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I love how you showed the circle going downhill. You achieved what you were supposed to do,all I can say is, this is truly awesome!:)
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Thank you so much!
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Very well done Ryan! However did you achieve that format? I love it. Just very good!
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Thanks, Jacqueline! I found festisite.com that converts your text to spiral form. This pushed me to go for the “downhill” story.
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Lovely! Thanks Ryan for the feedback. I will definitely check it out and explore to learn new stuff. Remain blessed.
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Nice decoration
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Reading it and reading it in spiral makes me feels as though I was slowly getting stoked with strange emotions. Oh this is really awesome.
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Thanks! Glad that it had that effect. That’s what I was aiming for, sort of. 🙂
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very cool, the spiral adds a certain sense it that matches with ‘downhill’
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Thanks! Actually the spiral gave me the “downhill” idea.
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How did you do that? I kept looking for a tool to do this, Photoshop? Gimp?
Well I spiraled downhill to your cold hands as you intended, reading in the spiral, and your anaphora reminded me each time that one cycle was done. Excellently executed! Bravissimo!
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Thanks for the kind words. Makes it worth the effort. Lucky I stumbled on festisite.com which created the spiral image.
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I’m going to try that!
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Amazing! I tried reading the words as they spiraled downhill first and I felt myself getting dizzy lol. But awesome write up. Would love to read a full story if ever you do one.
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Thank you!
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Your welcome 😃
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I really like the spiral down
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Thank you, Elizabeth!
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